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Author: lindseymoore

source/fundamentals/connection/tls.txt

@@ -77,13 +77,12 @@ in the following ways:
    see the :manual:`SRV Connection Format </reference/connection-string/#srv-connection-format>`
    section in the Server manual.
 
-.. note:: Workaround for an "unsafe legacy renegotiation disabled" error
+.. note:: Workaround for an "unsafe legacy renegotiation disabled" Error
 
-   The {+driver-short+} depends on OpenSSL by default. You may encounter an "unsafe
-   legacy renegotiation disabled" error in certain environments when using OpenSSL 
-   versions 3.0 and later, due to outdated SSL proxies. If you encounter this error, 
-   you can set the ``SSL_OP_LEGACY_SERVER_CONNECT`` option to resolve, as shown in 
-   the following example: 
+   The {+driver-short+} depends on OpenSSL by default. Outdated SSL proxies can 
+   cause an "unsafe legacy renegotiation disabled" error in environments using 
+   OpenSSL 3.0 or later. You can resolve this error by setting the 
+   ``SSL_OP_LEGACY_SERVER_CONNECT`` option, as shown in the following example: 
 
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